tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685608788672533401.post6194388150266428540..comments2022-04-05T03:02:08.815-06:00Comments on Intern 101: Redlined Resumes: a good example to startLulu Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14713133001416080918noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685608788672533401.post-58850284488872030212010-03-26T04:54:24.754-06:002010-03-26T04:54:24.754-06:00Thank you both for your comments.
I will work on ...Thank you both for your comments.<br /><br />I will work on rewording, as has been suggested, and adding more information about the awards: when you spend a few years at an institution, you forget that what seems 'well known' within the confines of your program might not be as known elsewhere!<br /><br />Thanks again!Amritahttp://www.amritaraja.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685608788672533401.post-79034358940880380962010-03-18T19:22:48.542-06:002010-03-18T19:22:48.542-06:00Anonymous makes a good point--when we have little ...Anonymous makes a good point--when we have little professional experience and lots of school experience, we tend to play up the school experience, and it's understandable and frankly expected. It may be more helpful in A.R.'s resume for her to drop an award or two and use the extra space to flesh out and detail more of what she did at here three jobs. And as Anon mentioned, better defining what the awards were for and what achieving them entailed will allow a potential employer to be properly impressed at what you had to do or how hard you had to work to earn it.Lulu Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14713133001416080918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685608788672533401.post-15077723390653712122010-03-18T11:21:24.851-06:002010-03-18T11:21:24.851-06:00My comments are based on desperately squeezing in ...My comments are based on desperately squeezing in 15 years of various professional experience, so I'm always looking for more space while keeping clarity. Over time I've dropped many of the awards type things and am constantly questioning the relevancy and understanding to others of what I'm including. As Lulu, noted what is great to take from this, even for those with more experience, is the simplicity. I think you are off to a good start though that will serve you well. <br /><br />I particularly like the School, Professional, Skills, Community headings and that they are the first column. While this person is recently out of school, I'd still put that category last out of the four. Then, if they are specifically looking for a design job, I'd change the chronological order of the professional category and move the design internship up to the top. This way you clearly show that this is the design work I've done, the skills I have, the related community work, and where the education came from.<br /><br />Coming out of undergrad it's very natural to say look at all of the stuff I accomplished while there. You have to remember though that most people at a firm, particularly if they are not related to your college or in your area will have no idea what these are. So, as noted I'd clarify some of the awards. What did the KSA award entail was it a house, a skyscraper or a funky T-shirt? If you have a work sample of these awards, all the better. Phi Kapppa... means little to the average resume reader, leave it out and buy yourself space to clarify the industry specific awards. Again scholarships while hard earned and notable really don't clarify much. Unless it's something immediately recognizable to the industry(The Frank Lloyd Wright Scholarship for...), I'd simplify the titles and move them up to to the education section. That's not to diminish the accomplishment at all, it just buys you more space to say what the other awards are. Move the French award to italics or parenthesis under your fluency skill set. Again, more space in you awards section.<br /><br />Was the organization you were President/Elect for the same that you were Webmaster for? If not, what was that organization? If so, you've used dates like bullets throughout and the separate years seem to imply different groups. This all may be abundantly clear with color, but I'm looking at a scanned B&W (not at all uncommon for this to happen and for it to be marked up and passed on that way). Finally, make a few tweaks in your word wrapping. It reads awkward to have Outstanding on one line and Senior on the next. Same with GPA - move it next to your degrees, etc. In addition to reading more clearly it will buy you a little more space to expand on some of the other items.<br /><br />Nice start.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com